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Eyes black and flinty,
He watches you in the night,
Stopping hearts with fright.

Where you don't expect,
Around every dark corner,
He waits to catch you.

Ghost who haunts your dreams,
Creature of whispered legend,
He is Slenderman.
I've only written a couple of haiku before, so I thought I'd give it another shot. I know, I know, Slenderman is such a cliche subject to write about, but it's an easy subject to start a new style with so don't judge me:tears: Anyway, tell me what you think!
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mothlets Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   General Artist
The ending really surprised me, actually. Slenderman has been ALL over the place and so I too was a little disappointed -- however it doesnt' change that it's written well. It's funny how such few words can create an emotional reaction! Very spooky. I thought it was about a stalker or somesuch. Good job. :)
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
Haha thank you very much:D
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artandmusic4life Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
haha so creepy XD well written tho!
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Student Writer
Haha thanks:D
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98darkwolf94 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012
I've been turning to Haiku a lot recently since it's an easy and fun form of poetry to express yourself with. I have a few up in my gallery if you'd like to see them. :)
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Student Writer
Ok, I'll take a look:) thanks for commenting!
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LivingInMyThoughts Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
Ahaha!! I was thinking Slenderman all the way through the poem with a growing smile on my face, and when I saw "Slenderman" I laughed out loud. As great as this is, I can't take anything concerning Slenderman seriously anymore because of all the funny things I've mentally done with Slenderman. My friends and I decided he needs a girlfriend. XD

Oh, poor, lonely Slendy.
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student Writer
Haha yes I know what you mean:XD: I knew I'd get a lot of comments about writing about him but I was trying out a new style of writing so I thought I'd choose an easy subject=P
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LivingInMyThoughts Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
Yeah. It's a good idea for practice, just... I can't give any critique or anything cause I can't stop laughing.
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student Writer
Haha no worries:aww:
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op3999 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
Slender Man is a cliche subject to those that want desperately to do with something that few others do. The people who don't pay attention to the merits something has, but instead try to make their work more interesting by being a novelty. Vampires aren't cliche, but Vampires as brooding high-society socialites, that's a cliche.

I don't think I get around to haiku as much as I could, its an art form that I simply haven't had a lot of contact with. The interesting rules associated with them, however, are definitely noteworthy. I like the spirit of this piece, to be sure.
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you for commenting:D And yes, that's why I decided to try writing a haiku. I don't write very restrictive poetry much, so I decided that, as a would-be professional writer, I should try to get experience in every type possible:)
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op3999 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
I, myself, am not so much of a poetry person. Some of it is just a little vague for me. I'm a man of science, so when I get to writing, I like to enjoy it, writing it, the story, etc.. Like improvising Jazz piano.

Every once in a while, I come across poetry, which sometimes I'll read, and sometimes it's vague, like I said. The times it's not, however, I really enjoy it. As such, I liked this poem/haiku(s).
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student Writer
Well thank you, glad to hear it:D
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student Writer
Pretty good in form, though I find Slenderman tedious beyond belief...
A solid haiku, though the theme isn't to my taste.
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student Writer
Haha yeah I thought I'd get some of that:no: Thanks though
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student Writer
It's hard... I want to like it, but I just despise anything to do with Slenderman.
The actual poem is perfect in form though. :)
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Student Writer
Haha well good, since form practice was what I was going for=P
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Student Writer
Well you have succeeded on that front. :)
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Student Writer
Ok good haha:D
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Student Writer
Sorry I can't be more positive about it. But it is great to see you doing more poetry :)
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MistressofQuills Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Student Writer
Hey I HAVE been doing a lot of poetry lately:(
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